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Looking at Persuasive Essays (Quick Publish)

September 28, 2006

Let’s take a look at one student’s persuasive essay. Look for the things on our list that we said we needed to include: 1) What did this student do well? 2) What can this student do to improve his/her essay?

I am a contributing member of our classroom community because I alway show respect, I want to learn and I help people. Here are some exsples.

I show respect, I help people pick up there thing like notebook, bookbag, and chair. If they need help. I show maner, and I show myself being a good kid.

I learn because I alway pay attention to my teacher Mrs. Caputo, because she tell us some thing inportant.

I help kid pay attentant to Mrs. Caputo for they could be smart and be helpfull.

I want everybody just like me for they could be smart, helpfull and show respect. So are you happy to have me in your classroom

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One Comment leave one →
  1. September 28, 2006 6:13 pm

    This person has 5 paragraphs.
    – Mrs. Caputo, 4-402 (304)

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